Before we get to the post, I have to apologize.
At the beginning of the year, I promised to post every Sunday, except for special reasons. This Sunday I wasn't at home all day and had my birthday in my mind, which is why I forgot. I'm really sorry guys. I will think about a special treat for you in exchange or you can suggest what I should do to make it up.
Additionally, I haven't been very active due to exam period, but as this is now over, I'm glad to be back in the bloggosphere and hope to see you all on your lovely blogs soon.


Here's this weeks post:

Aristotele says there needs to be a moment of change10. I’m glad to have a twofold one.
Amelie starts being concerned through Tyler’s violent behaviour; this worsens when her friend discloses his stalker knowledge. She changes from an ignorant blogger to a concerned internet user, which her last blog entry nicely sums up.

Also important: avoiding melodrama. The thought of what Tyler knows or could do is more intriguing than him attacking her, which I realized from Burroway and Stuckey-French11. The end is open to interpretation; Deborah taught me that this can be more effective. I tried this successfully in previous short stories. This way the reader ponders more about the future and the issue.

In my first draft, the club scene was way too elaborate and slowed down the pace. I cut a large bit. With the use of Simon’s pedantic editing notes12, I usually keep sentences very short. Here I concentrated on getting the right balance. The notes also helped me to cut over-explained parts like “she couldn’t tell what it was supposed to mean this time”, a mistake many of the stories I proofread often make. My own stupid mistake: I had to recheck the dialogue, because I accidently mixed it up with the German rules.

I don’t know about you, but I loved the working title “The Blogger Stalker”. Unfortunately, it gave away too much. I wanted the story to be more explorative. I went for the multipurpose “Green Friend Request”, which implies a comment on the Facebook blue, on Tyler’s green eyes and the naivety of Amelie.

Please tell me know what you think.

3 Comments:

  1. Donna Hole said...
    Sorry Nahno, I've been away a while. I read over the last few posts, and I have to admit, without reading the short story, I'm just a little lost in all the analysis.

    That's ok though. I did enjoy your thought processes, and the way you explored your writing and what it meant to the story itself. An interesting way of looking at your own writing.

    I enjoyed the inner workings of your writer's mind.

    I hope all your finals went well.

    .......dhole
    Nahno McLein said...
    Hi Donna,

    yeah, I'm aware of the difficulties. It was a Uni project and I thought I would share the thought process. I might publish the story later on, but first I want to get the results, see how to improve it and maybe take up some chances of other publications.

    So far, the finals are over, that's all I really care about. Results come later.

    Nahno
    Dorothy Evans said...
    I have to agree with Donna this week. As you get deeper into the process it's harder to follow, sorry.

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